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HalfSwede
03-26-2008, 05:16 AM
Hi Folks:
I just finished writing and posting my first sales letter for my muse. The site is not functional from the standpoint that the email sign up form still needs to be integrated, as well as the "Buy" buttons/shopping cart, "privacy policy" page, etc.

I would appreicate any feedback you can provide, however, at this point. To start, maybe some general comments related to sales copy, layout, "viewability", pricing of offer, bonus offers, overall muse potential, etc.

Here's the site: www.maxfundraising.com (http://www.maxfundraising.com)

Thanks,
HalfSwede
AntonTheKhan
03-26-2008, 05:47 AM
Hi Folks:
I just finished writing and posting my first sales letter for my muse. The site is not functional from the standpoint that the email sign up form still needs to be integrated, as well as the "Buy" buttons/shopping cart, "privacy policy" page, etc.

I would appreicate any feedback you can provide, however, at this point. To start, maybe some general comments related to sales copy, layout, "viewability", pricing of offer, bonus offers, overall muse potential, etc.

Here's the site: www.maxfundraising.com (http://www.maxfundraising.com)

Thanks,
HalfSwede

This will definitely bring some sales in. Your copy is great. The only thing that isn't, and thats the most important thing is....THE HEADLINE SIZE. Its too small and it is smaller than the subheadlines. Make it in a different color (red) and much bigger.
HalfSwede
03-26-2008, 01:18 PM
This will definitely bring some sales in. Your copy is great. The only thing that isn't, and thats the most important thing is....THE HEADLINE SIZE. Its too small and it is smaller than the subheadlines. Make it in a different color (red) and much bigger.

How does it look now?

Thanks for the feeedback!

HalfSwede
AntonTheKhan
03-26-2008, 03:23 PM
How does it look now?

Thanks for the feeedback!

HalfSwede

Perfect. .....................
webgal
03-26-2008, 11:41 PM
That is an awesome idea! Organizations are having a difficult time right now. Our annual school auction did end up clearing $70k but we had to really work it this year to get the donations.
HalfSwede
03-27-2008, 03:19 AM
That is an awesome idea! Organizations are having a difficult time right now. Our annual school auction did end up clearing $70k but we had to really work it this year to get the donations.

Hi WebGal:
Thanks! $70,000 for a school auction is actually very, very good! Is that for a public or private school. How many students?

PM me if you don't mind...I checked out your web site and would like to find out more about your services. I am just up the road from you in the C'ville area.

Cheers,
HalfSwede
lolpie
03-27-2008, 03:34 AM
C'ville? ME TOO!